My Poem:My Tortured Soul, Opinions please

[Silleone]

I am a tortured soul,
i sometimes play with my hole,
my pain you will never know,
no one knows but my crow,
he sucks on monkey pole,
he is also 5 years old,
i like a story with a twist,
i look like i dont exist,
i hit the walls with my fist,
then dip my head in piss,
my friend jake has a lisp,
he talks like hes taking a shit,
i work in a chicken factory,
my white friends call me blacky,
are they racist pigs or are they just unhappy,
they have little dicks,
i have a big dick,
they throw stones at my house becuz im dating a white chick,
when i take a shit,
i stand and look at it,
all the wonders of the world,
and im about to flush it,
i dont clean my toilet,
i take the water and boil it,
my tortured soul,please keep it a secret.


Thank U

 

[Hurts]

OMG u need ta chill with da bob...

 

[Silleone]

Do u feel my pain?

 

[jasedwads]

i feel ya pain homie lol

btw nice poem

 

[Hurts]

Do u feel my pain?

yeah man but to be honest...i havent even read it...lol...only the thread title...MY TORTURED SOUL said enough for me i feel ur** pain *praises his oprah skillz*

 

[S. Fourteen]

are you really dating a white chick? (just a question)

 

[Vaudeville]

you sometimes play with your hole?

 

[Jocka]

wow, i date a white chick 2.. i think i boiled my piss water once or twice... i feel ur pain man

 

[tHuG $TyLe]

Deep man..deep

 

[feichen]

pretty lame dude

 

[Hurts]

pretty lame dude

Just when u thought i stopped postin posts like this she steps up..

 

[PaulyPac]

yes keep ur poems in here silleone dont pm them me

 

[haunted]

yes keep ur poems in here silleone dont pm them me

he pm'd me this one:
Im cooler than ice,
im nicer than a chinese man delivering chicken fried rice,
right now im listening to obie trice,
befor buying his shitty album,i should have thought twice,
paris hilton is dislexic and anorexic,
how is it she can afford a lexus,
all my x's live in texas,
thats why i dont visit them on christmas,
what came first the chicken or the egg,
im fucking a girl now, she has beyonces legs,
she cut them off with sissors and cactus,
then sewed them on with tape and elastic,
michael jackson is a pedophile,
he finger fucked my homie kyle,
r kelly was in there doing it to,
except,instead of his fingers he used a screw,
the screw was long silver and rusty,
it left kyles asshole, damaged and krusty,
im writing this poem on a pc,
i live in the woods, please come and see me,
dont bother, cuz im not very far from u,
look back becuz im right behind u,
u know whats funnier than a dead baby
a dead baby in a clown suit.

 

[Illuminattile]

I froze your tears and made a dagger
And stabbed it in my cock forever
It stays there like Excalibur
Are you my Arthur?
Say you are

Take this cool, dark, steel-ed blade
Steal it
Sheath it in your lake
I'd drown with you to be together
Must you breathe?
'Cos I need heaven

 

[Silleone]

no i am not dating a white chick, infact, i aint even dating anyone, my poems are like pacs, u need to read them in and out to get it eg, "i look like i dont exist" means, YOU'VE ALL BEEN BAMBOOZELLED, RUN NOW,NOW, AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH, CRACK, CRACK PIPE, CRACK IN MY COLLAR,MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM CRACK, JIMMY CRACK KORN, FUCK KORN ,THERE WACK, THERE WACK, WACK THERE, YES THEY ARE WACK, NO LEAVE ME ALONE CROW, DONT LOOK AT ME, DONT LOOOOOK AT MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH, AHAHHAHAHAH SUPER SAIYAN 1,2, 3,4, SUPER SAIYAN SILLEONE, AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHH CRACK NIGGAZ, CRACK, HAHAHAHAHAHHA JUST LOSE IT.



wtf!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111!!!!111!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11111!!!1111!!!!!!!!1 o my god the faketrix hahahahah, its here my brothers, except it like it was your first piece of pusssy, HELLLLLLLLLLLLLP IM melting MEEEEEEELLLLLTING.

 

[S. Fourteen]

you're a net gangsta leone

 

[Silleone]

im so gangsta, my pc, types for me

 

[Jokerman]

no i am not dating a white chick, infact, i aint even dating anyone, my poems are like pacs, u need to read them in and out to get it eg, "i look like i dont exist" means, YOU'VE ALL BEEN BAMBOOZELLED, RUN NOW,NOW, AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH, CRACK, CRACK PIPE, CRACK IN MY COLLAR,MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM CRACK, JIMMY CRACK KORN, FUCK KORN ,THERE WACK, THERE WACK, WACK THERE, YES THEY ARE WACK, NO LEAVE ME ALONE CROW, DONT LOOK AT ME, DONT LOOOOOK AT MEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEH, AHAHHAHAHAH SUPER SAIYAN 1,2, 3,4, SUPER SAIYAN SILLEONE, AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHH CRACK NIGGAZ, CRACK, HAHAHAHAHAHHA JUST LOSE IT.



wtf!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111!!!!111!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!11111!!!1111!!!!!!!!1 o my god the faketrix hahahahah, its here my brothers, except it like it was your first piece of pusssy, HELLLLLLLLLLLLLP IM melting MEEEEEEELLLLLTING.

This was better than the poem. :thumb:

 

[_carmi]

^^
lolll

 

[Steph]

deep shit man :thumb:
keep writing