I worked on this rap a little before I joined the forum. I think I was 13-15.
Anyway, I've always wanted to rap. I'll have you know that I don't necessarily have the same mindset.
I want to put meaningful words like 'Pac to an Eminem tongue twister, with Drake like punch lines. That's my goal.
I'm going to start writing, so any constructive criticism is wanted, it was actually meant for a free-style like written for the intro to the album I was going to work on:
LEGEND:
Sickess is a play w/ words for success.
Cheekless is a spanish word for gum
I’m an ill-Student that spills-fluent flows with “sicksess”
Which kills you gent’s until you stench like hoes with sickness
I pop rappers like blown “cheekless”, MC’s and thee just don’t speak this
It’s like remixed English, Mixed-icans and me just leave you homos speechless,
Hitting yo weakness, til you condescend, while my monument spits impress-es yo groups empress,
I'll shrill ya kid, but I will admit, ya convalesce, will probably get you “press,”
but my loot, will smack ya back, to a stack of whack, I call plastic rap, yo JA's witness,
Ja-hova's witness will see me, 'spit' on your 'ass', so your raps'll 'shine' and shoot ya a track hit list.
I'm pimpness, like 50 you be 50 percent, sing and rap,
I'd vote fo you bros with my blokes and it'd be 50 to 50 percent, who is whack?
Down to ya root ya whack and pist
Don't matter though, ya'll lack a flow, but they'll make ya'll crack the dough in riches
cuz the movement in ya units is looped for a chorus for bitches
until you send away loyal true vets cuz you sold yo soul... so know this is fo mainstream rap,
grab a thesaurus-is to whoa mainstream crap!
This is MC Viscous, flow'n delicious to my new album,
take yo nose out, now you coughing up phel-*cough*-em...
Yo, this is just my intro,
just opening up my window, to let out this indo.
Anyway, I've always wanted to rap. I'll have you know that I don't necessarily have the same mindset.
I want to put meaningful words like 'Pac to an Eminem tongue twister, with Drake like punch lines. That's my goal.
I'm going to start writing, so any constructive criticism is wanted, it was actually meant for a free-style like written for the intro to the album I was going to work on:
LEGEND:
Sickess is a play w/ words for success.
Cheekless is a spanish word for gum
I’m an ill-Student that spills-fluent flows with “sicksess”
Which kills you gent’s until you stench like hoes with sickness
I pop rappers like blown “cheekless”, MC’s and thee just don’t speak this
It’s like remixed English, Mixed-icans and me just leave you homos speechless,
Hitting yo weakness, til you condescend, while my monument spits impress-es yo groups empress,
I'll shrill ya kid, but I will admit, ya convalesce, will probably get you “press,”
but my loot, will smack ya back, to a stack of whack, I call plastic rap, yo JA's witness,
Ja-hova's witness will see me, 'spit' on your 'ass', so your raps'll 'shine' and shoot ya a track hit list.
I'm pimpness, like 50 you be 50 percent, sing and rap,
I'd vote fo you bros with my blokes and it'd be 50 to 50 percent, who is whack?
Down to ya root ya whack and pist
Don't matter though, ya'll lack a flow, but they'll make ya'll crack the dough in riches
cuz the movement in ya units is looped for a chorus for bitches
until you send away loyal true vets cuz you sold yo soul... so know this is fo mainstream rap,
grab a thesaurus-is to whoa mainstream crap!
This is MC Viscous, flow'n delicious to my new album,
take yo nose out, now you coughing up phel-*cough*-em...
Yo, this is just my intro,
just opening up my window, to let out this indo.
