Lmao i can't believe dude said you sound black, wow, you sound like a corny white guy, truthfully. Only thing im feeling is the beat really. Your voice is annoying, you slurr some words, and then over pronunciate on some of them, i dont get it. It might be your accent or something. Whatever it is, it needs to change. To say you are good lyrically is an overstatment, waayyy over. Simple rhymes, real simple. How forced some of them are too, dude gave the best example already, "scurred......returrrdd." You cant be serious. I must say you have a weird flow, its not original though. You could probably join The Insane Clown Posse, heh, take that how you want. I dont know, i really can't judge someone off one song, but, im not liking this at all, corny ass hook too. I dont know, maybe you have some better shit you can post. So yeah, keep it up though, if it is something you love so much as it seems keep it up , Peace.