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[Sebastian]

ok, even tough the section is not active at the moment, i post another poem...

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Love is giving someone the ability
To hurt you but trusting them not to
A feeling which is built on
Everything we were going through


Love is no fairytale, nor is it perfect
Overcoming obstacles to make it last forever
Realizing every single second we put into
Was worth it - cause we did it together


Love is filled with risk and disappointment
But it still gives your life a greater meaning
What makes me so happy is
That I’ve found that unique special feeling


Love is on the lips of many
But in the hearts of just a few
Someone who combines both aspects
Is a cute, caring girl - you

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ok, maybe someone will reply in, lets say, the next 5 days..

 

[comin_up80]

damn man that was deep good stuff
i liked the style felt very relaxed

 

[Ivory$horty]

It's good to see a lot of pieces about love up on here. This was a nice piece, I enjoyed it. The last verse was my fav...summed up your entire piece pretty well.
Really sweet
Nice job...keep it up

3 hugz,2 kisses,1 love
~*Ivory$horty*~

 

[k69atie]

aww that was a really nice piece of writing, really enjoyed reading it, my fav was the last verse, thanks for sharing it and keep up the good work

 

[Sebastian]

thx Ivory and K69atie, i really appreciate your comments :thumb:

 

[k69atie]

^ No probs, your work is always a pleasure to read

The lady you wrote it for/about is very lucky

 

[The.Menace]

I think it's good too, even through, you only rhyme, every second line.

 

[dubk]

Love is on the lips of many
But in the hearts of just a few

This is a powerful statement that I totally agree with. People get the definition of love and lust mixed up constantly. You have a lot of stuff that you just touch the surface of...challenge yourself some more with some of these topics and get deeper. ...good job

 

[Sebastian]

thx The.Menace and dubk for replying :thumb:

 

[assassin_4001]

wow man good job,,,,u put it real nicely,,,,u have talent,,,,keep at it,,,,and show us more ,,

 

[~live2tell~]

Love is giving someone the ability
To hurt you but trusting them not to
A feeling which is built on
Everything we were going through


Love is no fairytale, nor is it perfect
Overcoming obstacles to make it last forever
Realizing every single second we put into
Was worth it - cause we did it together


Love is filled with risk and disappointment
But it still gives your life a greater meaning
What makes me so happy is
That I’ve found that unique special feeling


Love is on the lips of many
But in the hearts of just a few
Someone who combines both aspects
Is a cute, caring girl - you

was feeling this, its truthfulness is refreshing. i liked the structure and the rhyme scheme, real nice job and must be some special lady you found there to inspire something like this... happy for you

keep writing hun

 

[Sebastian]

wow man good job,,,,u put it real nicely,,,,u have talent,,,,keep at it,,,,and show us more ,,

thx for feedback :thumb:

was feeling this, its truthfulness is refreshing. i liked the structure and the rhyme scheme, real nice job and must be some special lady you found there to inspire something like this... happy for you

keep writing hun

thx for these nice words...nice to see you back

 

[Kadafi Son]

Hey I like that. That first rhyme to. It's true. Peace and keep that love shit comin