S.O.N ft Mewreckall - The Sunrise (our first beat)

[Shot 21]

Replied to KC ft Cooleon - Love Kill and Mark Deez - God Of War

A deep song about personnal problems and shit. Featuring Mewreckalll of ABM. The beat is by Ant. Peep this and tell me what you think. Listen out for the mention of Street Hop.

Chorus: Shot 21 / J Loose
Verse 1: Shot 21
Verse 2: J Loose
Verse 3: Mewreckall

Mewreckall wrote his verse in the studio on very short notice. Props to Ant for the beat.

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=406268

 

[Ant]

Not heard this beat in a while to be truthful. I quite like it if I may say so myself.

Real clean quality hear man, nice to hear. Flow is relaxed, nice, it gets abit hectic partway through and falls off but you get back on track.

You guys did pretty nice with this beat, I enjoyed hearing this. Good job peoples.

 

[Preach]

the flow kinda slurs at times, like you're rapping faster than the beat so it's like, not off-beat cause that's such a strong and negative word, but if we're gonna use the term purely technically i noticed the flow going a VERY WEE bit off-beat at times. that's something that only practice can improve though. this is a tight track though. very relaxed and nice. i'm actually gonna put this on my mp3 player, i really liked the track as a whole.

and i have to say props to ant on the beat, that's a really dope beat. it sounds like a radio joint. i'm listening to it on some shitty headphones on a laptop with a laptop speaker amplifier but it sounds crisp to me. the bass sounds really really nice. you (ant) seem to have a good ear for mixing because the mixing is flawless. the mix is clean, uncrowded, every element of it is clean and easy to point out in the mix, and this shit sounds really refined.

props on the vocal quality too. once again, crisp nice track :thumb: i'm gonna go ahead and rep both of you for it.

 

[Shot 21]

Thanks the both of you. I think this is the best lot of feedback that I have recieved for a track. My confidence is boosting lol.

 

[Shot 21]

Anyone esle?

 

[Bigg Limn]

Yeah beats pretty nice...synth is kinda hypnotizin. First verse is pretty solid, flow gets a bit fucked @ times but nuthin major. Hooks basic, but works. 2nd verse sounds a bit worse, pronounciation is a bit 2 slurred. Delivery too soft, sounds scared almost. 3rd verse is a bit fucked overall on the pronounciation, verse sounds pretty jumbled. Not a bad track tho, keep workin on the fine points.

 

[TG1 Ghetto One]

ive just checked out this track and the first track you posted and you can hear alot of improvement straight away from that track to this one, flows more on point, some of ya's speed up ahead of da beat but not long, ya soon get back on da right lines of the beat and carries on smooth from there, gotta give you props for making suttin sound good with a leicster accent cause i know that aint the greatest accents to work with but i suppose at the same time can show individuality, anyways overall nice drop keep at it

 

[Malkz]

you've improved alot..

 

[HipHop77]

s'aiight you do slur abit, thas it tho, othewize its all G, beatz dope.

 

[Shot 21]

Yeah beats pretty nice...synth is kinda hypnotizin. First verse is pretty solid, flow gets a bit fucked @ times but nuthin major. Hooks basic, but works. 2nd verse sounds a bit worse, pronounciation is a bit 2 slurred. Delivery too soft, sounds scared almost. 3rd verse is a bit fucked overall on the pronounciation, verse sounds pretty jumbled. Not a bad track tho, keep workin on the fine points.

Im on the first verse

Thanks yall for the replies. All repped.

 

[WayCide-Ridah]

Yo' Ant nice job on the beat

As for the song, I never really listened to hip hop outside of the US (except for a french hip hop track that I still bump even though I don't know what there saying) anyways back on topic, I liked the concept, hook was nice cuz we all trying to make it thru the darknights, 1st verse was coo, 2nd verse kinda fell off at parts but was still pretty good, now the 3rd verse could use some more work on the flow...vocals were pretty crisp, not all static or anything like that, mixing was pretty nice too, not over riding the beat or too under it...but overall I'm a bump this song N' support yall's music 7.5/10

overall good job

 

[Shot 21]

Yo' Ant nice job on the beat

As for the song, I never really listened to hip hop outside of the US (except for a french hip hop track that I still bump even though I don't know what there saying) anyways back on topic, I liked the concept, hook was nice cuz we all trying to make it thru the darknights, 1st verse was coo, 2nd verse kinda fell off at parts but was still pretty good, now the 3rd verse could use some more work on the flow...vocals were pretty crisp, not all static or anything like that, mixing was pretty nice too, not over riding the beat or too under it...but overall I'm a bump this song N' support yall's music 7.5/10

overall good job

Appreciate the feedback man. Repped.

 

[crittaz]

beats nice
the hook needs some work. sounds kinda dead.
first verse flows decently. some parts here and tehre where i can hear it go off slightly. second verse sounds a little too weak. i know the song doesnt need too much energy but still. flow is decent. slipped from verse one but still decent. verse three.. horrible pronunciation. just does not sound good.. bad point of the track.
overall is a decent track. keep droppin

 

[jeremy_]

Damn, nice beat. Feeling it straight away.

Chorus: Shot 21 / J Loose
Tag team type thing in the chorus is good, works well.

Verse 1: Shot 21
Good lyrics. I fell like I have heard this before, have you posted a previous version of this track? Anyway, you are speaking on some deep stuff which fits the beat well. Like me you are rapping with an accent that we are not totally used to hearing in hip hop so stands out for that.

Verse 2: J Loose
I like this guys voice more - a bit softer. Flow is a little bit choppy but not too bad. Not feeling the bit of talking at end of his verse. Content ties in well with the hook and theme of the track though.

Verse 3: Mewreckall
I fell that he goes a bit off topic, get self repping but its not too bad. My least favorite verse - a bit short!

Not feeling the 'YEAH' at the end, but it's a pretty good track. Nice and laid back.

 

[Shot 21]

Damn, nice beat. Feeling it straight away.

Chorus: Shot 21 / J Loose
Tag team type thing in the chorus is good, works well.

Verse 1: Shot 21
Good lyrics. I fell like I have heard this before, have you posted a previous version of this track? Anyway, you are speaking on some deep stuff which fits the beat well. Like me you are rapping with an accent that we are not totally used to hearing in hip hop so stands out for that.

Verse 2: J Loose
I like this guys voice more - a bit softer. Flow is a little bit choppy but not too bad. Not feeling the bit of talking at end of his verse. Content ties in well with the hook and theme of the track though.

Verse 3: Mewreckall
I fell that he goes a bit off topic, get self repping but its not too bad. My least favorite verse - a bit short!

Not feeling the 'YEAH' at the end, but it's a pretty good track. Nice and laid back.

No, havent posted ay versions of this song before. Maybe you heard it in a dream one day lol. And yeah I agree we definately got voices that stand out.

Thanks all for the replies. Repped.
1 Love

 

[j_loose]

yo just signed up and i appreciate all the feedback, and as 1 part of s.o.n i often browse this site with shot 21 and try to take all of yalls feedback into consideration which is probably why you have all noticed an improvement since the first track we dropped, i am not quite sure on what you mean about my pronunciation though, could it be my accent do you think but once again thanks for the feedback.

 

[Shot 21]

yo just signed up and i appreciate all the feedback, and as 1 part of s.o.n i often browse this site with shot 21 and try to take all of yalls feedback into consideration which is probably why you have all noticed an improvement since the first track we dropped, i am not quite sure on what you mean about my pronunciation though, could it be my accent do you think but once again thanks for the feedback.

J Loose you son-of-a-bitch! Waiting for you to sign up you lil cracker. This is my partner in crime and fellow S.O.N member to all who dont know. Tag Team champions of the world lol!

 

[Tru Principle]

Well the first MC came the tightest, and in general you all came good. But since you can drop one solid line, you can drop 16 solid bars. You just have to be consistant with your flow. All of you kind of get a little off flow here and there, but nothing that practice can't solve. Your lyrics are definetly heart felt and all I can say is you have potential to be really good. But you gotta keep practicing and keep recording. You have many things that are not up to the bar, but what you got is potential so use it..

Good luck, nice drop.

 

[Shot 21]

Well the first MC came the tightest, and in general you all came good. But since you can drop one solid line, you can drop 16 solid bars. You just have to be consistant with your flow. All of you kind of get a little off flow here and there, but nothing that practice can't solve. Your lyrics are definetly heart felt and all I can say is you have potential to be really good. But you gotta keep practicing and keep recording. You have many things that are not up to the bar, but what you got is potential so use it..

Good luck, nice drop.

Appreciate the feedback man. Will take that in. Cheers.

1 Love

 

[Mr Marz]

gotta getz ur flow down more. practice makes perfect. sounds good other than that like the song.