Am i the only one who didnt like this?
Real Talk, what talk, you really said nothing. The flow was blah also, i dont want to say forced but you try to fit so much or little in one bar you have to pause between it, makes it real choppy. Its like your holding a word in the middle of a bar so it can end right, but it sounds completely wrong. Your rhyme scheme is pretty basic also, the first 4 bars were elementary, i would say try harder but i think thats what your doing to much of, let these words come to you. By the way your singing thing dont sound bad, its not like your really singing anyway but that would be the least of my worries if i was you, construct a style and find your flow, keep it up though.