Raorblade - A Dream

[Razorblade]

It's been a few weeks since I dropped something here but Uni's been a drag lately and I have a lot of work I gota get on top of but I took some time out today to write and record this.
It's a cover of Jay-Z's "A Dream" from Blueprint 2 all about the troubles in Northern Ireland.
I wrote and recorded it this afternoon - I feel like it's missing something; perhaps you could help me out.

http://www.soundclick.com/razorblade
First song on the music page.
Enjoy.

 

[Ant]

Thanks for the reply on my track.

Real nice beat - as someone who can't tolerate Jay Z, I've never heard this beat or the OG song before I don't think. But I love this version. Nice lyrics, and a class message with them ofcourse. Flow is pretty nice, I feel you're improving this aspect with every track and its real important.

I love the acapalla bit at the end, I thaugh it'd finished and that just hit me then. Has big impact. :thumb: Nice drop.

 

[Sith Angel]

Dame I love that beat.
The theme of the track is tite.
Hold up, you punched in or something. After the line
"a life where I chill and can live unharmed" (around 0:55)
it sounds like its been mixed different, or you had 'em on different tracks.
I think the mixing of the rest of the verse after that line was a lot better.

If you gonna use the 'punch in' or recorded 8 bars at a time,
you got to mix down the whole verse into one track before you mix it into the song.

it just stands out to mush, maybe I'm wrong about the mixing and
you just recorded the parts at different times but it does stand out.

In whole, it's a nice track and I'm feeling the theme.
you got some hot lines in there too.

keep 'em coming.

 

[Razorblade]

Thanks
When I was recording I put it down twice and for the first time ever I had to mix in one of the recordings and it really shows at the part you were talkin about. I could tell when I done it that it sounded obvious but I felt it actually added to the song on some level but I guess not

Thanks for the feedback
Anyone else?

 

[Y G B youngbugzy]

yea I like the beat aswell, your flow was koo, alil choopy at time tho, and ur right it does seem to be missing something, cant really feel it, maby if you do some adlibs?
trippy voice also. not bad, just different.
overall not a bad joint.
~1~

 

[alleyezonme0707]

That picture on your page is dope as hell... The lyrics are good and meaningful, can't understand many cause of the accent, I like the end of the verse the most... That acapella ending is hard as hell...I think your vocals are loud, try overdubing them and lowering them, that should help...Nice drop