mai - single tears 2 full cries

[Outla Spirit]

recorded this earlier... was bored as fuck :thumb:

just messin about with a few lyrics i had layin about, and seein what i could do with this pac beat... i have no other beats :laugh:

just wantin some comments bout this... only 1 min... but leavin comments always appreciated...

heres the link -

http://www.outlawz.frihost.net/mai2.mp3

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[Diaz]

You go off alot, and you should have started a bar later, doesn't sound right where you started. I can't understand what you're saying because of the quality, but you have a pretty tight voice. Keep it up.

 

[Outla Spirit]

You go off alot, and you should have started a bar later, doesn't sound right where you started. I can't understand what you're saying because of the quality, but you have a pretty tight voice. Keep it up.

yea, i agree bout the start... kinda 2 early...

well the track isnt finished yet so ill correct the mistakes... thanks 4 the comments tho... appreciated...

 

[GhettoStar]

agree with the homie your voice is ill espcially since your accent doesnt mask your flow. You should have seprated your bars so your flow is more smooth since it is more rapid fire even though it sounds good at parts, you ride the beat well right now but I think if you spaces out your bars better it be more effective, the mic level sounds low to me and I can't understand some parts of it but overal this was a good rough draft of a song that should turn out well.


"I don't give a fuck...what was left"

reminded me of Pac (in terms of how you delivered that part)

 

[Outla Spirit]

k im gonna try and do somethin about the spacin between the bars... the mic level on this 1 was low will b sure 2 change that next time...

more c/c is welcome :thumb:

 

[thuginme]

is it just me or link doesn't work?

 

[Bigg Limn]

aint work 4 me either