what did you use to record? the words and everythin sound clear but sounds like you recorded over a phone or suttin its got that kinda recordin affect, anyways flows quite on point from what i heard i think ya need to put more energy into some of ya words though its like when ya try say suttin agressive you holdin back cause you worried encase it might sound stupid or suttin, jus feel what ya sayin more and put more energy in it, overall sounds all right to me, i think you got potential keep at it