Cant Seem To Upload The Damn Song, So Rate The Lyrics

[Shot 21]

I did my first song on saturday the 10th with my group S.O.N but I cant seem to upload it for anyone to listen to so Im gonna upload my verse (I dont know the other 2 off by heart) for yall to tell me what you think about it. Weak? Strong? All comments/criticsm will be repped. The song is called Remember The Name and is over the How We Do beat:

If they really want war, they gon need a lot more
S.O.N mutherfucker and we make our own laws
You bite our style so much you faggots cant have teeth
You a secret vegetarian, you cant have beef
See, this is how we do it every mutherfuckin day
We aint never gon stop we goin all the way
I wanna clock 6 figures everytime I get paid
I wanna have 6 bitches everytime I get laid
The streets will hear my music first, fuck the radio
Well be number 1 I dont care which way we go
You hatin on me, but they all love my style
Girls harass me in the club and say they love my style
But I aint fallin for that shit, you think Im stupid?
If she wantin me to fall in love she better call Cupid
Theyll be bumpin this in every UK hood
Listenin to soulja shit like the UK should

Cheers

 

[True Thugz]

It's aiight I guess. It's simple and it looks like it could flow nicely. Your lyrical content is too general for me. Heard it before or it sounds similar. But it is your first go at a song so I can't be all judgemental. Post up the song and I'll check it out.

 

[bigCASH]

^i kind of agree with him...i thought it flowed nice but the lyrcis are too basic for me and i didn't like the two lines you used the same rhyme for...but i'll check it out in the unsigned hype if you post it

 

[Shot 21]

http://www.2pacboard.com/forum/showthread.php?p=351657#post351657

The song.