Anticipation

[The.Menace]

Anticipation

It seems so strange yet so simple
gotta focus and work, will probably stay single
Cuttin' down on sleep - no matter what it takes
I gotta knock on this door until it shakes, breaks
Once I entered the room there is no stoppin' me
In vain I'll set free what they call my insanity
so I can cure, chill - let all go
lay back in peace cause I know
I reached what I'm destined 2 represent
see ya'all later on as I flow 2 heaven's end
can't no one touch me no more, I'm gone
and I deserve peace 'cause I search for so long


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[Preach]

that's nice. if you saw the other thread i replied in i already said im not into this text shit im just checking by here, but i thought this was cool. the last two lines are on some epic shit. :thumb:

 

[Farzin]

I agree the last two lines are very nice.

It's a very nice little piece. I like some of teh rhyme schemes like the "shakes,breaks" parts its not all the same old schemes.

All in all very good little piece.

 

[Sebastian]

Nice little poem. Good flow. :thumb:

 

[The.Menace]

@preach - nice to see see

Farzin&breal - thx for replyin'

 

[Beautiful Angel]

Never cease to amaze me Meance...Good as always

lay back in peace cause I know
I reached what I'm destined 2 represent
see ya'all later on as I flow 2 heaven's end
can't no one touch me no more, I'm gone
and I deserve peace 'cause I search for so long

really loved that part

Keep up the great work as I know you will

 

[The.Menace]

Nice to see u comin back to the board and not only that, but also postin' in here in PJ, I enjoy that, we need people here.

Thx for the love I guess.

 

[Beautiful Angel]

of course ima post here.....I was the ORIGINAL mod of Poetic Justice SicC and I made the rules many moons ago lol....i'm thinking of posting some of my stuff too, but we'll see about that. maybe once i get a computer at home

btw: its nice to be back

 

[The.Menace]

uppin' cause I want 2

 

[GhettoStar]

Anticipation

It seems so strange yet so simple
gotta focus and work, will probably stay single
Cuttin' down on sleep - no matter what it takes
I gotta knock on this door until it shakes, breaks
Once I entered the room there is no stoppin' me
In vain I'll set free what they call my insanity
so I can cure, chill - let all go
lay back in peace cause I know
I reached what I'm destined 2 represent
see ya'all later on as I flow 2 heaven's end
can't no one touch me no more, I'm gone
and I deserve peace 'cause I search for so long


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I see that your fav. topic is still your fav. topic, but the fact is that you do this well. The sentence structure you chose for this piece flows good as well as keeping it simple in a way for the reader to understand the despondecy that you are feeling. Although I wish you'd get a more upbeat view of your life, this was once again a good read by you....keep me posted on the poem book and less with the sarcasm (you bastard)

 

[The.Menace]

Hi there. First of all, thx for comin in here and bring some life, we need that. Second, I don't see this piece as that negativ man, u know, after all the first part is about ...success somehow...and the second part about beein able 2 rest in peace cause I had it all, u know, that kind of thing.

I'll post something new soon, will try to find something without death so u're happy. lol.

Thx for replyin.

P.S: Did u move? I mean, weren't u in SF before, now it says Sactown...?

 

[GhettoStar]

hahaha always been round tha sactown area homie but U still got it man just we talk bout that subject all tha time we'd talk but yo U do it well, no need 2 change plus I did notice U flipped it a bit

 

[The.Menace]

Ah well, I start to remember the discussions about the kings back then, dunno where the thought of SF came from. Anway. Stay active.

 

[Devious]

Ah well, I start to remember the discussions about the kings back then, dunno where the thought of SF came from. Anway. Stay active.

it's been a while since i've been here, thought i'd pop in and drop some props for you. i really like this one, the way it flows is nice. it's not as dark as some of your other stuff for a change, but even that stuff has it's charm as well. good work, and keep doing your thing. good luck on the book :thumb:

 

[kman_69]

It seems so strange yet so simple
gotta focus and work, will probably stay single

^^yeah, first 2 lines are nice... made me keep reading

cool drop man, keep it up...

 

[The.Menace]

Hey Dave, thx for stoppin by. long time no talk, you basically quit your msn activity eh?

kman, glad you liked it n don't worry I keep it up as always.

 

[THEV1LL4N]

likin it, there is a good flow, nice rhythm and descriptive text.

 

[The.Menace]

Thx for the feedback sandeep, stay active.

 

[ArtsyGirl]

nice poem menace, shorter than your average I believe.. But still great.

 

[Tha_Wood]

thats a good poem, i would like to be able to write like that.