Still Hiding

[kman_69]

heres another drop...hehe im sure i wont get many replies...even tho i've replied to every thread in PJ! ah well....here it is anyway:

Still Hiding -12 December 2005

what the fuck is wrong with me? am i normal?
-is it normal to ask that? -it sounds horrible!
ignore it..store it all up, and let it go..
-show urself what u know is worth knowing
..just throw it on a page, and save urself
makin rhymes is a great way not to blame urself hey?!
great!..i mean, in ways it beats doing weights
but it aint what it weighs ..its just me waiting
-to be waited on in different ways..
..using word play as an escape..
but in the end its all the same, its ALL word play
and these days i dont really write my name..
i just change it around and make faces..
its called "self hatred" for making mistakes
-yeah im ashamed, but what else can i say?
i know im lame.. just look at what i fucked up today!
WAIT!, my girl hates me coz i dont kiss her coz she smokes?
..man, i feel like we make love without her even knowing it!
-its low points like these that make me strong? how absurd!
..coz in my job interview today i sounded stupid and nervous
and the reverse of this is my own basic perversions, which
-i've converted from feeling like an awkward virgin..
..to a fuckin perverted person..i mean, its ridiculous
the viciousness and suspicion in my drug riddled visions
-its kind of non-descript ..but i try to describe it..
while scribing these rhymes...but shit, im still hiding!

 

[The.Menace]

LoL, this made me laugh cause it's different, it's more like you talk to yourself here then actually to others and it's kinda funny how you jump around in your mind. Anyway, I didn't like the rhymes, you have some good in there but as you know I'm way more strict about the schema and the structure then you are....

pz

 

[kman_69]

hehe im glad that came across....coz thats exactly how i wrote it...had a really shitty day, and yeah..just got all my thoughts out...

usually im more strict with the rhyme scheme (tho i think this one works well)...and the flow, but yeah...its just how i put it down...

 

[Jokerman]

It was good. Reminded me of Eminem.

 

[Cown]

Kman you're crazy! Haha nice drop, very confusing but yet well put together read. I like it, has a nice sence of humor over it.

 

[Kaos88]

yeh i liked this piece too...was something different
good work Kman well done

 

[XIAN]

and these days i dont really write my name..
i just change it around and make faces..
its called "self hatred" for making mistakes

This is a good poem and I liked it because it deals with how you write out these things that make your life rough and at the same time admit that it's your fault. I can relate to those and I think I've written many like them (what I call "trajedies"). This one feels "lighter" like you've turned anger into a kind of humor or a sadness that seems so unreal that you can laugh at it like "Well, that's my luck!"

~peace~

 

[kman_69]

It was good. Reminded me of Eminem.

hehe eminem? fair enuff...thanks man!

Last edited by Jokerman : January 24th, 2003 at 09:44 AM.

^^lol whats with this shit man??,,,its been on a few of my posts...some sort of bug huh?

 

[kman_69]

Kman you're crazy! Haha nice drop, very confusing but yet well put together read. I like it, has a nice sence of humor over it.

lol thanks man! were all a little crazy man

thanks for peepin!

peace.

 

[kman_69]

yeh i liked this piece too...was something different
good work Kman well done

thanks heaps...always like to try different things...

thanks for peepin!

peace.

 

[kman_69]

This is a good poem and I liked it because it deals with how you write out these things that make your life rough and at the same time admit that it's your fault. I can relate to those and I think I've written many like them (what I call "trajedies"). This one feels "lighter" like you've turned anger into a kind of humor or a sadness that seems so unreal that you can laugh at it like "Well, that's my luck!"

~peace~

once again Xian....u know exactly where this peice is commin from! good stuff man!....good to see someone understand my work like that!

thanks for peepin man!..glad ufeelin this one!

peace.

 

[~live2tell~]

You used so many words to say so little... and I actually really like it alot. Jokerman said it reminded him of Eminem and I agree with that comment. Great light-hearted drop, nice work Kman :thumb: