nother keystyle from the top of the head(wrote to "im so fly")

[down n' dirty]

ibeen away for awhile but now im back/
spitten sixteen at you like a lyrrical gat/
with wordplay thats over your head by floors/
and metaphors thats never been said before/
tired of white rappers? well here's one more/
so dope he sweats heron right out his pores/

im old school bitch ,you better believe it/
chain hangin out so everybody can see it/
had to take out the diamonds cuz my earz was freezin'/
better ask some body if you aint believin'/

step to me you best roll as deep as jesus/
or say goodbye to your nephews and nieces/
have your kin sayin"god damn that boy of denise's"/
you know the one thats sharp as creases and slick as grease is/
come shootin' shit up with bullets bigger than police's/
ill make sure ya mama finds out what grief is/
youll be bleeding from the mouth and leakin' feces/
its sad you came in peace but you'll leave in pieces



just a quick 18

 

[down n' dirty]

uppin for feedback

 

[Id]

Pretty nice key. It had a nice flow, some simple rhymes and vocab.

with wordplay thats over your head by floors/
and metaphors thats never been said before/

Nice flow, I liked the first bar.

its sad you came in peace but you'll leave in pieces

Solid ending.

Overall: it was pretty good. Keep writing.