My Demise

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

it is known that we all
shall fall victim to death
so i am going to express
my feelings of coming to my last breath
in the event of my demise
i relise that everyone dies
and when it is my time and my eyes close
for eternity my friends and loved one will cry
will my death be perpously?but i hope it is for a purpose
and not worthless.because i relise i have flaws it is writin in the walls of my mind.
so what is my destination in the event of my demise

 

[verse]

this was good
to much like tupac's
had depth
cool rythm scheme
overall 8.5/10
yo check out mines its called CORVUS CORAX. gimme some feedback

 

[Cown]

Reopened, reply to 3 more to get the other one opened as well

Thanks

 

[~live2tell~]

Good piece, my fave part was here >>>

will my death be perpously?but i hope it is for a purpose
and not worthless.

That part jus stood out to me. I'm guessing that It was Pac inspired? You made it your own though - nice work.

 

[MaKa\/eLiThaD0N]

ay thanks sara yea it was inspired by Pac and things like that run threw my mind at times so i figured i would put it on pad

 

[jm5471]

"will my death be perpously?but i hope it is for a purpose
and not worthless.because i relise i have flaws it is writin in the walls of my mind.
so what is my destination in the event of my demise"

this was my fav part, it had good depth and i liked the style that u used in it, good writing

 

[Buck_Buck_Bing]

This was really shit, i dont think i will be putting on my wall.