manhood

[shattered dreams]

Tell me what i need to do
To recieve love from you
Anything and everything
To stop this suffering
and finally bring
joy into my life
finally detach this knife
from my wrist
no longer slit
no more bullshit
time for changes to stick
now its time for reality to hit
realize your no longer a kid
kiss your childhood abid
and step up to the plate
change your mentalstate
to the mindframe
of a true mans game
and let that change forever remain



so now your stuck feeling alost and alone
not realizing that your a man, now fullgrown
saying you feel like "my house is not a home"
stuck in your life,full of monotone


Please im begging of you
realize games are through
and manhoods true
time for you to see
life, aint always whats it cracked to be
but reality
will hit ya hard
leave ya scard
so now your standing in your yard
looking up at the sky
asking god why
why life is troubled
problems doubled
asking, where did you stumble
how did your solid ground, crumble
so you stopped and thought
youve finally realized, all the time you fought
with the clock
to turn back time
to get a chance to rewind
so you can leave your mind
in those peaceful days
so you could not change your ways
scared to become a man
because troubles can
find their way in
and you wouldnt know where to begin


so now your stuck feeling alost and alone
not realizing that your a man, now fullgrown
saying you feel like "my house is not a home"
stuck in your life,full of monotone


Maybe you feel
becoming a man cant be real
are your scared your not strong enough?
baby you know that are nothing but tough
No matter how hard or rough
The future may be
Just know you will always have me
But thats why im begging
To realize your age is starting to up
its now time for you to finally step up
And ill be there with you
Seeing your troubles through
Making sure you conquer everything, that youve ever wanted to
Please realize that im true
And so is my love for you
thats why you need to become a man
Take as much responsibility as you can
And not always lean on another persons hand
no more excuses
you need to do this
if you want to stay with me
Please face reality
and you will see
this relationship grow to be
perfect, no flaws,fights are gone
all trust issues, haved moved on


so now you are a true a man
finally realizing, in life where ya stand
knowing you have a girl that truly loves you
And now your a man, through and through

 

[~live2tell~]

Great piece, felt the rhyming was a lil forced at times, but you kept me interested throughout (and it was a long ass poem)!! Keep it up

 

[jm5471]

damnnnnn this one was long but it was good , i liked the way that you used your transitions and it flowed well together, keep up the writing

 

[Rigade]

this is a song right? cuz one said good poem.. but sence i see choruses... but it was alll good.. i'd prolly take out "so now your standing in your yard".. definately forced that.. doesnt go good wit ur flow neither..

 

[MonroeThaDon]

yea the rhyming does seem a little forced but none the less its a very nice job.

 

[jaimie.uk fan]

cool poem - anyone who sits down and writes anything from the heart good or bad deserves respect . excellent job much props !!

 

[k69atie]

good peom keep it up

 

[Sebastian]

the "rhyming-problem" was already mentioned. nontheless a nice poem.

Maybe you feel
becoming a man cant be real
are your scared your not strong enough?

^
a question i think many people have to deal with...