~love You~

~Assail~

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This Is To You Gurl, You Know Who You Are!

~Love You Babe~

You make me So Happy,From ya looks to ya Personality
Size 8 fine Body,Never Gota Worry When ya Wit Me
Turnin me Soppy,In Love Im Crazy
Future Lookin Promisin, With you i hope im Ageing
Stayin Close,Still No Arguin
Keepin you Smiling is my Mission
Love Burning lika Arson,Swear ya God's Giv'en
Having me Fallen "So Into You" it's "Fabulous"
Leaving me Breathless by are Deepness
So Faithless it's Fearless Being so Humerous
Ive Never met a gurl like You, it's True
Ya Beautiful,'n' Lookin after you i Do
With So much Trust between Us
It's Wreckless,Far From Sexluss
Hopefully one day il be sayin I DO
So baby just wanna let ya know I LOVE YOU
 
Lots of emotion and deepness, but over simplistic rhymes killed it for me. Try rhyming with the entire word, or try multis. Always using the last part of a word "-ing" really ruins the creativeness in a rhyme IMO.

Other then me being picky about the rhymes, good drop.
 
yeah...WestRhymes kinda had it on point. U can feel the emotions in there. But the rhymin' is way 2 basic. It gets borin' right as soon as you start readin' it. Its decent, but check out other people rhymes 2 kinda see what u can do 2 make yours better.
 

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