Droppin` some words.

[.:ORiGiNALOLDiESz:.]

You can't look at me and know my history.
Know the path that I've walked
The trial and tribulations I've survived
You can't glance quickly
At how I walk dress or carry myself
And know me not know OF me
But TRULY know what I'm about
You can't hear my words and
Completely understand the
Foundations of these words the
Significance of the emotions that linger
In the depths of my soul maybe
Similar
To those stories you've been told
All the words you've heard before but
Comparisons Ignorant judgments
Assumptions Or what you Claim to "See"
All the stereotypical things you
Look for when you look at me
Tell you nothing
About who I am, Where I've been
Or where I'm going to so please
Don't push that ignorance
That lack of knowledge on me
But instead HEAR my words
Just take a minute And let them settle.
Ready ...
Set ...
Go ...

 

[DaRoYaLbRaT]

Aaahhh this is tight! I re-read this a few times 2 fully absorb it, I like the way ur words flowed, I was feelin the structure of ur thoughts, dat was tight..

You can't look at me and know my history.
Know the path that I've walked
The trial and tribulations I've survived
You can't glance quickly
At how I walk dress or carry myself
And know me not know OF me

^^ tight.. im feelin that right there.

Foundations of these words the
Significance of the emotions that linger
In the depths of my soul maybe
Similar
To those stories you've been told

^^ I was really feelin that aswel.


All the stereotypical things you
Look for when you look at me
Tell you nothing
About who I am, Where I've been
Or where I'm going to so please
Don't push that ignorance
That lack of knowledge on me

^^^ This is an awsome piece of poetry, 4 real! im lovin it. ma bad 4 pullin ur work apart like that! keep it up tho! mad job

peace

 

[Jurhum]

805 huh? the new 805 or the old 805?

anyway, nice drop.. it flowed nicely like daroyalbrat said.. keep it up man

 

[Kadafi Son]

Yeah, I agree with DaRoYaLbRaT. I had to re-read a few times cuz it was kinda hard to find the flow, but you had a nice message in here. Kinda reminds me of my topics. But good work

 

[The.Menace]

I couldn't find the flow even it I re read it, poor me.

 

[.:ORiGiNALOLDiESz:.]

My bad it's been forever since I've signed on.

Here is a link to my snapvine thing
To hear it spoken.

Ms. Lita: Snapvine

When I wrote this it was all in one big idea.

 

[Tha Thug Poet]

the poem gives me that whole don't judge a book by it's cover vibe. Even though you hear that phrase all the time for some reason it never seems to click and we keep doing it over and over again. I like the poem. Gives you insight to what you were thinkin ya know.