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Death (influenced & convinced)

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Jocka

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I haven't wrote in a while.. lately i've been thinking about death ALOT, more than I EVER have.. I was reading something online saying that people sometimes know they're going to die by feeling..(like Pac did).. anyway, so i was setting at work last night and I wrote this..

Death (influenced & convinced)

It's said that before you die
You think about dieing
Night and day I lay awake lately
Debating with my mind and soul
Is there a heaven or hell?
Afterlife or reincarnation?
Or just foot steps plopping
Six feet above my coffin?
My terror is not of loneliness or boredom
But what to be proud of
Accomplishing nothing in 19 years
Why did I waste my life?
Why did my life waste me?
No answers returned
.. that makes life too simple

…..

Sometimes I think I know..
I know how I'll die
Because nightly the back of my head is cold
And the front is hot
A Gunshot? Maybe just impaled..
A brain function gone wrong
Due to the excessive thoughts
And questions, implying death as suggestion…

…..

I honestly feel my time is coming short
Maybe in a second, a minute, a hour
A day, a week, month, year
Leaving this world with only one fear
What change did I make?
Who did I please?
Influenced and convinced
My life will soon end…
 
I think about death too especially how I'll be remembered, and how people who just know me as a face, image or a memory will be affected by hearing that i am no longer around. Also people that really knew me and felt me, how they'll react. I'm your age minus one and I think the same thing but look at it this way: nineteen doubled is 38. There are 38 year olds who haven't done anything influencial and purposeful (?) either so I think we'll be okay if we realize that life is usually long (not that we shouldn't make the most of it) and by the end we have done something important for the world. I don't know if this helps u or not I may just be talking to myself.

Good poem though.

Peace.

And it's good 2 see some1 who's been here for longer than (or even as long as) me. It has been good for my adolescence, being here for these years.
 
XIAN said:
I think about death too especially how I'll be remembered, and how people who just know me as a face, image or a memory will be affected by hearing that i am no longer around. Also people that really knew me and felt me, how they'll react. I'm your age minus one and I think the same thing but look at it this way: nineteen doubled is 38. There are 38 year olds who haven't done anything influencial and purposeful (?) either so I think we'll be okay if we realize that life is usually long (not that we shouldn't make the most of it) and by the end we have done something important for the world. I don't know if this helps u or not I may just be talking to myself.

Good poem though.

Peace.

And it's good 2 see some1 who's been here for longer than (or even as long as) me. It has been good for my adolescence, being here for these years.
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Yea, i figure as long as i'm alive, i should try harder to make an impact on somebodies life or human nature all together. I want to be well known for achieving something great; I'm just too lazy to try lol..

Yea, this place helped me thru some times too.. alotta help when u need a laugh especially lol ..people r crazy on here
 
i liked this poem, proved poetry isnt always about rhyming. know what you were feeling too.

my favorite lines were

Why did I waste my life?
Why did my life waste me?
No answers returned
.. that makes life too simple

so complex, yet simple. very nice.
 
well i cant really relate to the topic (death) itself because i dont have these kind of thoughts...but

Why did I waste my life?
Why did my life waste me?
No answers returned
.. that makes life too simple

..are my favourite lines. sometimes i think "why do i waste my potential..why am i so lazy and do do anything for school to get better marks." but like u said: "no answers returned"...
so overall i like your poem :thumb:
 
i like it, it was deep and i feel what ur sayin cause ive felt like that before n it makes u go nutz thinkin bout it over and over, good shit to keep it up
 
Very good poem Jocka, and most of the time you don't actually realise the impact you may have already made in anothers life - that's usually the best kind I think. Keep writing, I enjoy reading your poems.
 
I can relate to ya man. A week ago I thought of suicide seriously. (haha) I laugh now coz a lot has changed since then. I had 'death' bottled up for a whil though..ya feel.

Well I liked the poem even if it's about death. Shit is real!

"Why did I waste my life?
Why did my life waste me?
No answers returned
.. that makes life too simple"
^^fav. lines.
Described how I've been feeling for a while.

Keep up the tight work Jocka.
 
"Sometimes I think I know..
I know how I'll die
Because nightly the back of my head is cold
And the front is hot
A Gunshot? Maybe just impaled..
A brain function gone wrong
Due to the excessive thoughts
And questions, implying death as suggestion…"

my fav part. ^
it was good man
it had depth. and thats always good
great structure
what i didnt like was the voc, it was to simple for me
overall 8/10 GOOD THINGS
 
Deep poem man..
Don't think I really think about death a whole lot.. too busy lol.. but I feel wat you're saying.. must be unnerving huh?
Great poem of course.. as I've come to expect that from you over the years :)
Good 2 see you can still produce thought provoking poems
KEep it up
peace
Belo
 
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